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Red paint
on a beige wall,
              heat--
              spices the air.
I run my fingers
through
the course grains
of crumbling stone,
watching
flowers bloom,
           in  your presence.
I miss you.
©Amber Lucas
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:iconcamelopardalisinblue:
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely lovely lovely. :)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconcamelopardalisinblue:
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. :)
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Alontwig Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Photographer
Wow, really well done! The ending is really well put together.
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks so much!
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:iconalontwig:
Alontwig Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Photographer
Your quite welcome!
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gangstalike Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
"watching flowers bloom in your presence", I think, is the most powerful line. This could be interpretted so many different ways, really lovely poem
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconkushamisaru:
kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very sweet piece, but I'm not sure what it's about....

I'm guessing it's a dead person considering the description
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Not quite, but similar, more about lost love.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I read it aloud with the breaks where you broke the image and then the breaks with the punctuation. I'm not sure either was read how you intended.

Because it didn't feel smooth the first way. It looks prettier that way, but I can't read it that way.
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whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Understandable, I get what you're saying. I think I still need to play with it some more but your comments do help, thanks.
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3RiiN Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Short and sweet. And, may I say, VERY well-written! :clap:
:+fav: 'd it !! ;)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconmindofinsanity:
MindOfInsanity Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Great writings. I love your words.
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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CreatorAllanvre Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Swift and meaningful, keep it up.
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
:+fav: A lovely little poem that really packs a punch. Thank you.
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   Writer
You're very welcome!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
:+fav: A lovely little poem that really packs a punch. Thank you.
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:iconklinone:
klinone Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
wonderful . I think this one is really good :)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
I really like the visual nature of this poem. Good work!
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconroamingtigress:
roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
You are very welcome!
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Perzikhoofd Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice visual poem. I love how it looks so sipmle but isn't, as you discover when you start reading it. Great work :clap:
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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Perzikhoofd Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :dummy:
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MeishkaBokeh Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely words.
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconzed-designs:
ZED-Designs Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Interface Designer
Good...:)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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Strobili Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
lush and vivid I love when you can taste words. Well done
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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AnaInTheStars Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Professional Writer
I love the visual you give with this poem. My favorite phrase is:

heat--
spices the air.

I love this. I would never have seen it like that. Very poetic too.
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whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks! I'm glad you appreciate it!
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:iconklinone:
klinone Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Well done. I think this is really nice :)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
interesting... :heart:
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :D
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VanitysEdge Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome! As a previous comment said the flow is excellent!
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconbro-palmer:
bro-palmer Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Cool poetry :)
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whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconroamingtigress:
roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Good read; I really like the flow :)
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:iconwhitelightwings:
whitelightwings Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
You are very welcome!
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